Writing - Part 2 - B2 First (FCE) - Practice, Write & Improve
Exam Question:
Type: Review
You have seen this advertisement in an English-Language magazine.
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Restaurant review wanted
Have you been to a restaurant recently that you either loved or hated? The best reviews will be published in the magazine. |
Write your Review.
Student's Answer:
“The \”Bond\” restaurant
The Bond restaurant is a newly-opened restaurant in the center of our town. It is the best place for families and friends to spend a nice and quiet evening eating delicious homemade food. I had the opportunity to go there to celebrate my birthday and I had a wonderful time.
As you enter the place you are welcomed by a familiar atmosphere. Regarding the food, they offer a variety of bread rolls as a starter, with tomato sauce, mozzarella, zucchini, and almonds. The main course that I had consisted of pasta. It tasted like heaven on earth. They also have desserts on the menu. I chose to have ice cream. Seldom have I eaten such remarkable ice cream.
Slightly disappointing though, was the service. I had to wait twenty minutes for the dishes to arrive, as there were only two waitresses. However, in their defense, I must say that they were very young, kind, and friendly.
Despite the long wait for food, it was absolutely mouthwatering, and the atmosphere was charming. For this reason, I have no hesitation in recommending going to the Bond restaurant. I would give it 5 stars.
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Feedback:
The "Bond" restaurant - an appropriate title
Have you been to any restaurant recently that has left you with an unforgettable culinary experience? (ask a rhetorical question) I definitely do. (engage the reader) The Bond is a newly-opened restaurant (relevant expressions) in the center of our town. Barcelona. (add location) It is the best place for families and friends to spend a nice and quiet evening eating delicious homemade food. (descriptive writing) I had the opportunity to go there to celebrate my birthday (narrative writing) and I had a wonderful time. (expressing a positive impression)
This is a review written for a magazine so you should address the readers and try to get them interested in your review.
- engage the reader - ask a rhetorical question, interact with the reader, make the text more personal
- add relevant details - location of the restaurant, readers should know where it is located
As you enter the place you are welcomed by (narrative writing) a familiar atmosphere. (adjectives) Regarding the food, they offer a variety of bread rolls as a starter, with tomato sauce, mozzarella, zucchini, and almonds. (subject-specific vocabulary) The main course that I had consisted of pasta and (link sentences) It tasted like heaven on earth. (strong positive impressions) They also have desserts on the menu, so (link sentences) I chose to have ice cream. I must admit, seldom have had (before past) I eaten such remarkable ice cream.
Phrases and expressions as well as vocabulary related to the topic of culinary are present - excellent!
Pay attention to the correct tone - if the content of the task states that you have to describe that you love or hate something, then it means that expected from you are intense emotions.
Slightly disappointing though, was the service. (topic sentences) I had to wait twenty minutes for the dishes to arrive, (useful information for the reader) as there were only two waitresses. However,(linking words) in their defense, I must say that they were very young, kind, and friendly.
Despite the long wait for food, (contrast clauses) it was absolutely mouthwatering, and the atmosphere was charming. (descriptive writing) For this reason, I have no hesitation in recommending (recommendation) going to the Bond restaurant. I would give it 5 stars.
Content: 4/5
have you answered the question?
All content is relevant to the task. Target reader is almost informed.
- Have you been to a restaurant recently that you either loved or hated?-commented
- Your opinions- commented
- Tell us about specific elements of the restaurant which caught your attention- only indicated
- add relevant details - (location of the restaurant) readers should know where it is located;
Communicative Achievement: 4/5
have you completed the task in the right sort of language?
Elements of descriptive, evaluative and narrative language appear correctly in the review; Narrative, descriptive & evaluative
- engage the reader - ask a rhetorical question, interact, make the text more personal
- Pay attention to the correct tone - if the content of the task states that you have to describe that you love or hate something, then it means that expected from you are intense emotions.
Communicates straightforward and complex ideas/expressions, as appropriate.
The organisation: 4/5
have you structured your writing properly?
The review begins with a correct introduction, description of the item being reviewed, there are paragraphs in which the topic is developed and an appropriate ending with recommendations
Occasionally the sentences are not as clearly connected as they could be, use more conjunctions (and, or, but, so, because) and linking words Linking words and phrases
Ideas are balanced appropriately, with suitable attention and space given to each one.
Language: 4/5
have you used a good range of grammar and vocabulary?
Errors, are insignificant and do not impede communication.
Vocabulary is used appropriately to the topic; common phrases relevant to the specific task are used
Use other grammar structures appropriate to the written text (conditionals, wishes, regrets, passive forms, past modals, subordinate clauses)
Score: 16-17/20 Grade: B2 /C1-
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